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 Posted: Fri Feb 23, 2007 9:39 pm
Hey, Can i get your opinions on this song i wrote for my band Oh Dear?
Complete Nostalgia with a Case of Translucent Mind
Even though its’ my heart you choked
All the love is still in my cloak
To break the mirror in time
The beating heart will unwind
Heavens doors beyond the sea
Even without the real me
Forgive and forget
Every word you regret
Time to unwind the earth
Under a new spells curse
So no one will cry or disperse
Eat the nostalgia to grow strong
After a certain break of dawn
The will transcend your mind
To the beginning of time
Hell broke loose that night
Even under a guiding light
Forgive and forget
Every word you regret
Time to unwind the earth
Under a new spells curse
So no one will cry or disperse
Didn’t expect a translucent mind
Even to beckon along with time
A hard world that you grew up in
Died in my arms but not with sin
Forgive and forget
Every word you regret
Time to unwind the earth
Under a new spells curse
So no one will cry or disperse
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Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 2:52 pm
That's awesome.
Its so sweet.
4laugh
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Posted: Sat Mar 10, 2007 2:02 pm
Really good lyrics
It's great biggrin
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Posted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 4:08 pm
That's incredible! I'd love to hear it sung.
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Posted: Sun Mar 18, 2007 9:09 pm
I LOVE it. they are really amazing. You should totally put this on your demo CD when you apply for a record contract
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Posted: Sun Nov 04, 2007 9:26 am
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Posted: Sun Nov 11, 2007 10:48 pm
Very imaginative... Provokes a lot of interest in what all the metaphors mean! You make it with that one, you're going to have to tell the story, because all your fans are going to want to know!
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Posted: Thu Dec 06, 2007 12:13 pm
They are ok. It seems like you can understand everything right away and there is not really subtlety, but popular music doesn't really require that.
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Posted: Wed Jan 30, 2008 6:28 am
My only opinion is that, you had a rhyming theme going on, which is ok but you could have been a little more lax on that. Other than that I loved the layout, and when the song is finished give me a buzz I would love to hear it.
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Posted: Fri Jun 26, 2009 9:33 am
Thats intense I love it. I also write lyrics and poems.
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